I am writing a erotic romance novel. I have written the first four chapters totaling 10180 words. Briefly, the story is about a midwestern woman who is an innocent in the world. She has always lived a sheltered life in a small town. She is sent to Bangkok by her employer. Here she has a variety of erotic experiences and meets a mysterious half Japanese half American man. The story ends with the central character having achived a level of personal growth and positively facing the future.
You will help me by answering/commenting on the following points. Bear in mind the typical reader for such novels. 1. Is the premise of the story interesting? 2. Do the first four chapters generate interest and make you want to read more? 3. Comment on writing style, choice of words, sentence length etc. 4. I am not a woman. The main character is. So I have chosen to write in third person. Does this work? Is my depiction of the internal dialogue accurate?
I am NOT looking for grammar, spelling corrections. If you happen to notice them, fine. But that is not the objective.
Please provide a cost and time proposal. Thank you
